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When I Go There Now — 38 Comments

  1. I usually hate atmospheric details. I hate teaching novels where the author blathers on and on about unnecessary description of the flora and fauna…yet, this is something else. I’ve metaphorically been to that bar, and you captured it completely. I would have read it and enjoyed it even without the last two lines that add so much to the story. Please tell me one of these is being worked into a bigger piece.

    Agents and publishers! Are you aware this girl is unsigned? Do the reading public a favor and give her a book deal!

  2. Love the details! I haven’t been to a bar/club since I left that whole scene, though I’ve been to pubs that serve food. Those don’t smell so bad. I’ve also realized that I don’t like beer. It’s like drinking bread. But back then….

    • I don’t really like beer, either, but I wouldn’t turn my nose up at a glass – especially at the end in what I think of as my “Gollum” days. Yea, pubs that serve food? No problem. Bars specifically for drinking? Weird being there.

  3. This was cool.I love the way you tie in the pop culture references with first the alt rock bunch and then the legends – what a great way to create an atmosphere and a feeling to the scene. (also not every day you get Social D references!)Not sure if I’m using I’m using the right adjectives but in short – I liked it I think I will use music in soe of my fiction to help with setting and so on.

  4. Great details! I don’t go to places like this anymore, mostly b/c I’m a wine snob. I don’t love beer except for occasionally and they always have terrible wine at those places. You are very strong for going in there!

    • I was always the same way about beer until the end, where I would’ve drank paint thinner if it’d given me a buzz. I was more of a wine person, too. No matter how many years pass, it gets easier, but then it doesn’t…

  5. Like some of the others I wasn’t sure where this was going, but when I got near the end my heart stopped! I swear I could feel the details and atmospheric details clicking into place. I’ve re-read it a couple of times now and I have to say that I love it. Great job!

  6. Funny and poignant and wonderfully descriptive. One day at a time, one social engagement at a time, right? And wait a minute – how could anyone play an uninspired version of “American Girl”? That’s hard to do and just plain wrong! ๐Ÿ˜‰

  7. Firstly, this line “A veritable rainbow of alcoholic colors filled the glasses”, creates the most amazing imagery in my head!
    There are other great lines in your post which all recreate that place beautifully. I am left mystified at the end of the post. Great Post. ๐Ÿ™‚

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